말로 하실 때는 스펠링 틀려도 상관 없으시지만,

혹시 글로 쓰실 수도 있어서 스펠링 틀린 것들도 고쳐 봤습니다!

파란색이 철자, 빨간색은 첨삭입니다

Helly my name is 000 and i,m 22 years old student who specialized social welfare in 00 university

-> Hello. My name is 000 and I'm 22 years old.

I'm a student in 00 university, and I major in social welfare.

first i,d like to tell you why i choose the social welfare as a major

-> ~ as my major.

when i was young, i had a oppourtuniy to volunteer at public structure where people in poverty are living. 

-> ~ I had an opportunity to volunteer at public facilities where poor people live.

that experience comes to me really shock. i,d never see such scene before. after that time, i decieded that before i gone away from this world, i will help people who are living hard life

-> That experience was so(really) shock. ~ I decided to help the hard people before I die.

next, i,d like to tell you my personality

i,m a bright person and never despise any other person. that,s because of my parents education

my parents taught me that there is no person who have no strenth and everything comes back as you done before

-> My parents taught me that no one in this world has any strength.

also my parents taught that people want to be a friend who always has smile in the face

-> ~ people always want to be friends with someone with a smile on their faces.

i think those value makes my personality and it has act a good asset to me when i make relationship with new person

-> I think those values make my personality and it is my good asset when ~

thank you